03-18-2016, 01:13 AM
(03-17-2016, 10:11 PM)Surge Wrote: I badly need to work on pacing, I tend to do a lot of rapid fire dialogue with very little flavor.
My issue is that my dialog is as incoorrect gramatically as speech used by my characters. And so it irritates the critical saying "you made mistakes everywhere." And being able to respond. "None of those were mistakes, that's literally how the characters speak, and think." Usually freaks them out. How often do you accidentally end up thinking in run on? In that skull a' yers? Or with additional, unneeded, pauses caused by inability to think of that one word that just skipped your mind? How often do we actually, use perfect grammar when we write stories, whether it's a character thinking or speaking? All else deserves it, as it's easier to red. But why do we represent something false about the character thoughts?
On another note.