05-23-2015, 11:36 PM
//As primarily a spectator, I think the major problem here is totally random things being introduced with no prior explanation or relation to anything. There's some alright extended plots here which I can actually follow because they are introduced gradually and are internally consistent, but there is also a lot of *waves hand* <Huge problem from nowhere> *waves again* <huge problem is magically gone because I said so> which just trivialises the nature of whatever you were trying to introduce.