10-23-2015, 04:18 PM
(10-23-2015, 06:30 AM)Lost Rinoah Wrote:
I need help with input on this as I took no part in the original thread aforementioned. So it'll be a complete cold start for me. Hoping anyone who needs to could criticize me constructively to benefit the development of this character. And possibly another later depending.
Among the problems:
Avali biology here doesn't reject the materials used in their prosthetics, and the Avali are masters at prosthetics anyways. Actually, it seems you missed most of the posts I did on their canon, but they did get buried quickly.
You mention Starbound metals at multiple points. That's okay, because I've barely listed what metals we do have.
This is also over the amount of information needed. You did a lot of work on it, but it's partially impenetrable.
Lastly, the name doesn't fit, as Avali names are majorly vowels with patterns. Yes this is from the original canon.
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